I can’t breathe, you took
Away my heart, now I exist
Only on the Surface.
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Ideas that pop into your head when you least expect it
I can’t breathe, you took
Away my heart, now I exist
Only on the Surface.
Fountain Of Thought 
I like how you broke that up.
It breathes differently.
I used to get in trouble in class when I did that stuff…but i loved it! poetry breaks rigid rules any way.
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Yes! So true. It’s so much fun to explore beyond the confines of convention.
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I love this haiku, it tells a story in such a short space, it’s done really effectively.
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Thank you so very much for commenting. I am glad you liked it. 😃 I love haikus
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I love haikus….I think its one poetic form that goes unnoticed but is so powerful. Just the history of haikus is interesting. Post more please!!!
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Thank you so much, and yes I shall. 😃
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excellent!! I love this, so simple yet such depth!
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Thanks so much!,
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This haiku….is soooo amazing!!!!
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Thank you very much for reading. 😀
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I love HAIKUs.. ❤
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So do I, atleast recently I learned to love them. 😃
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🙂 🙂
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Well written, thank for the heart
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Yours is definitely more heartfelt than mine! Your writing is so succinct and powerful. Great delivery.
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Thank you so much for reading it! 😃
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Hello, random gal passing by to say that I am loving your blog. I decided to check you out after seeing one of your post reblogged and I must say that I really love your style of writing, how you use your words and how they connect so well and I can relate to many of your post, so far my favorite is the “Sometimes I get a little saucy” post 😀
Keep at it and you have earned yourself a new follower, love your blog! ^^
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Thank you so much! You really made my day, it’s so nice to see when people can relate to your work. 😄💗
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Your welcome! *^^* Keep at it, you’re good at what you do and I’m happy to know that I made your day. c: ❤
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Oh My, this is Marvelous!!
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Lovely… And touching.
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I loved this and find it profound. I think we all exist on the surface at times and hopefully we find our way back down deep.
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Yes. Hopefully. 🙂 Thank you very much for taking the time to check out my work
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just three lines of depressed thought
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Amazingg! So much feeling in those three lines
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Thanks so much for reading. 😃
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Very sweet! 🙂
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I like poetry. I don’t get a lot of it, but I know a good one when I read one. This was captivating, and succinct. Very nice!
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I love how this conveys so much in a few words!
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Empty within. Portrayed so well 🙂
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Being India…being Indian. with high priority to English.. still I struggle to feel the poetry in your poem…
Don’t take it ease…we indians still struggle to translate many tamil books to English……I think you could understand what I try to say…
We know English poems…but unable to feel it..
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Yes I know what you mean. Other language may not always give you the same feeling as the ones you are familiar with.
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But … Its still good to have relationship with guys like you whom I haven’t seen..that you understood my feelings…
Thanks a lot…be in touch..
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Much power in this one!
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Poignant stuff. Emotions can be damaging from time to time.
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Very true
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Thank you for the invite! I was attracted by the haiku so here I am first – simple words evoking depth! 🙂 Keep writing and sharing your works!
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Thank you so much for reading it. 😃
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