Haiku from the heart

I can’t breathe,  you took
Away my heart, now I exist
Only on the Surface.

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38 thoughts on “Haiku from the heart

  1. I like how you broke that up.
    It breathes differently.

    I used to get in trouble in class when I did that stuff…but i loved it! poetry breaks rigid rules any way.

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    1. Yes! So true. It’s so much fun to explore beyond the confines of convention.

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    2. I love this haiku, it tells a story in such a short space, it’s done really effectively.

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      1. Thank you so very much for commenting. I am glad you liked it. 😃 I love haikus

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    3. I love haikus….I think its one poetic form that goes unnoticed but is so powerful. Just the history of haikus is interesting. Post more please!!!

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      1. Thank you so much, and yes I shall. 😃

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  2. excellent!! I love this, so simple yet such depth!

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  3. This haiku….is soooo amazing!!!!

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    1. Thank you very much for reading. 😀

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      1. I love HAIKUs.. ❤

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      2. So do I, atleast recently I learned to love them. 😃

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  4. Well written, thank for the heart

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  5. Yours is definitely more heartfelt than mine! Your writing is so succinct and powerful. Great delivery.

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    1. Thank you so much for reading it! 😃

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  6. Hello, random gal passing by to say that I am loving your blog. I decided to check you out after seeing one of your post reblogged and I must say that I really love your style of writing, how you use your words and how they connect so well and I can relate to many of your post, so far my favorite is the “Sometimes I get a little saucy” post 😀
    Keep at it and you have earned yourself a new follower, love your blog! ^^

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    1. Thank you so much! You really made my day, it’s so nice to see when people can relate to your work. 😄💗

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      1. Your welcome! *^^* Keep at it, you’re good at what you do and I’m happy to know that I made your day. c: ❤

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  7. Oh My, this is Marvelous!!

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  8. Lovely… And touching.

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  9. I loved this and find it profound. I think we all exist on the surface at times and hopefully we find our way back down deep.

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    1. Yes. Hopefully. 🙂 Thank you very much for taking the time to check out my work

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  10. just three lines of depressed thought

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  11. Amazingg! So much feeling in those three lines

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    1. Thanks so much for reading. 😃

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  12. I like poetry. I don’t get a lot of it, but I know a good one when I read one. This was captivating, and succinct. Very nice!

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  13. I love how this conveys so much in a few words!

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  14. Empty within. Portrayed so well 🙂

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  15. Being India…being Indian. with high priority to English.. still I struggle to feel the poetry in your poem…
    Don’t take it ease…we indians still struggle to translate many tamil books to English……I think you could understand what I try to say…

    We know English poems…but unable to feel it..

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    1. Yes I know what you mean. Other language may not always give you the same feeling as the ones you are familiar with.

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      1. But … Its still good to have relationship with guys like you whom I haven’t seen..that you understood my feelings…
        Thanks a lot…be in touch..

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  16. Poignant stuff. Emotions can be damaging from time to time.

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  17. Thank you for the invite! I was attracted by the haiku so here I am first – simple words evoking depth! 🙂 Keep writing and sharing your works!

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    1. Thank you so much for reading it. 😃

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